Sunday, 17 August 2008

Suburban Garden

Shadows slant over a cobbled courtyard,
bees buzz in scented air,

an orange kitten lounges.

Sunlit statues in the corner
and herbs in terracotta

against an ochre wall.

Behind a wrought iron gate
in a high wall
by an ordinary
town path.


not haiku, but still in the moment for Read Write Poem

27 comments:

holly said...

Nature is always the extraordinary, and it's even more so when we find it in the midst of the ordinary! I love this!

polona said...

a little piece of heaven not far from the maddening crowd :)

Janice Thomson said...

I'm right there! - how could one not be with such beautiful imagery.

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

Good use of haiku form....and wonderful word snapshots of moments.

-Nicole

Jarod K. Anderson said...

Sounds like a nice place to spend an afternoon. Great images.

gingatao said...

Beautiful and it has wonderful sounds as well as a beautifully constructed visual tour.

Crafty Green Poet said...

Holly - thanks, I agree i love finding nature in ordinary places

polona, janice - thanks

nicole - not actually haiku, but thanks

jarod, gingatao - thanks

scatterhaiku said...

lovely cozy garden poem. :) a beautiful oasis which is unfortunately hidden from most passers by...

anthonynorth said...

Nature finds every possible place to thrive in its diversity. Pity we're ignoring this truth of life, and following sameness instead.

maekitso said...

A wonderful moment. This really provokes the senses.

Nathan said...

Wonderful -- a lovely painting with the orange kitten offering a colorful contrast in the scene.

christine said...

What beauty lies hidden behind garden walls. Lovely, uplifting verse.

Annamari said...

...and behind the wall you would make the town vanish.Yes, I can remember that.

Lirone said...

This is almost all really lovely and evocative of a special moment

Though for some strange reason the orange kitten jarred on me - my mental image was a bit too dayglow! ;) Just my idiosyncracy, I suspect!

Thanks for sharing this lovely moment!

gautami tripathy said...

This is wondrous!

plunging in the tunneled abyss

Linda Jacobs said...

Wow, you write about these ordinary but wonderful sights so well!

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

you have captured it perfectly!

odessa said...

lovely images! i'm also captivated by the picture of a lounging orange kitten.

Rethabile said...

I can see it.

durablepigments said...

What a wonderful scene... so peaceful, so warm. (Oh, if only you could be LITERALLY transported through reading! ;) )

throwshiswords said...

i'm with durablepigments - i wish i could visit!

Peter said...

I want to stay in that first stanza. The whole poem comes across to me like a Bonnard painting (especially with that orange cat).

primdollie said...

I love this.. what a lovely vision it brings to mind!! thanks I enjoyed that very much!! Hugs Linda

AmbiguityLotus said...

Even though you said it wasn't in haiku form, but you surely did capture these moments well! :)

It's interesting to see how you carried and transform an image from one stanza to the next. For example, the "orange kitten" from stanza one becomes "sunlit statues". Do you see the parallel/pattern of colors? It's the same with the "ochre wall" (2nd stanza) and the "high wall" with the 3rd stanza.

I don't know if you realized that, but I certainly did! :) Thank you for sharing as I enjoyed this piece!

Also, thank you so much for visiting my poetry journal at Livejournal. :)

Crafty Green Poet said...

Ambiguity Lotus - thanks for noticing the colours - i didn't consciously think of it like that but colour was uppermost in my mind when i saw this and when I wrote it...

Lirone - I guess it depends on the shade of orange you see!

Anthony - you're right, very true...

scatterhaiku, maekitso, nathan, christine, annamari, gautami, linda, andrew, odessa, rethabile, durablepigments, throwhiswords, peter, linda - thanks

Jennifer said...

What a wonderful moment! I love all the alliteration. Once again, you do so much with so few words so well.

rootcellar said...

This was a lovely snapshot, distilled down to the essential parts.